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I'm looking at the red and yellow sky.
But my eyes burn.

I'm frantically running through my mind.

The people I've met,
The ones I've befriended.

The dreams we sketched,
The days we lived.


How long away were they?
It seems like seconds ago that we breathed the summer's night air.

We were kings of those days and nights.
Careless and free.

Misguided, nothing we cared for.
Our eyes aimed for the sky.

Conversations of simplicity and complexity.
Girls, fears, what lays ahead for us in the years.

But those days are gone,
those days were beautiful.

My tears evaporate within seconds of their life.
Like my life, just seconds.


Those days are here though, dancing around me.....
Or is it just the flames?....
...
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Agnes-Arelia Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
A very interesting piece. I enjoyed reading it.
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CherishKay Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Featured here: [link]
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Devil-Loves-Angel Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2011
Thank so so much:3.
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CherishKay Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome, I was glad to do it :aww:
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chocopie5 Featured By Owner May 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
i like the last two lines. they just kind of sneak in there and BAM!-soulpunch. :D
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Devil-Loves-Angel Featured By Owner May 13, 2011
Haha, thanks:)
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CharityK Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
I am the reviewr for literature in the group "#1-10". I apologize for the delay in reviews but its hard to keep up with all the literature contributions we get. I have rated your work a 6 for advanced artists. I really enjoyed this, especially the originality. The only reason I did not rate it higher is the fact that grammar could be improved in some areas. Thank you for the contribution and if you have any questions, send me a note!
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Devil-Loves-Angel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011
May you tell me what grammar troubles I had? Thanks.
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CharityK Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
gladly! the only few I would say is where it says "How long away where they?" I, personally would have said "How long ago WERE they?" or even keep it like you had it but say "How long away WERE they?". Also, where you said "We were kings those days and nights" Im not sure if you meant to say "We were kings OF those days and nights" or "We were kings, those days and nights". Nothing that severe, of course, and nothing that was that distracting from the feel of the poem, which I REALLY enjoyed! I hope you weren't too offended by my rating!
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Devil-Loves-Angel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011
Oh no not at all! ^-^. And I am really glad you mentioned these mistakes to me. I HATE making errors like that. Thank you again, I'll fix those right away.
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